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I'm soon going to be putting lots and lots of my poetry onto this page so stay tuned and please leave comments
Love always
Hazel.....
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..::Grand Final Victory::..Crack the can Shout the boys Hang the Medal Make a speech watch heads turn take the fight Kiss her cheek Arm around her Take the cup Lap of honour Hold it high Show em' why Scream it out yell it loud shout to the crowd So crack the can Shout the boys Make us proud And dont let down..::Grand Final Victory::..
by ~Broken-Tears-Poetry
..::BANG::..lost..::BANG::..
Broken Torn Shattered Unspoken My heart is shattered Has been for a while Everything gets better for a while BANG...... Broken again You dont feel the pain everything I try to do makes things worse BANG..... Broken again It doesnt matter this time I'm fine As good as I'm gunna get BANG..... I'm gone........................................
by ~Broken-Tears-Poetry
..::She::..She lays in bed Covering her face she cries in the night and hides her life when sunshine comes she hides and runs she's so lonely..::She::..
Needs help Desperate for love She only wants a life she wants a life worth living.......
by ~Broken-Tears-Poetry
..::I LOVE YOU::..Don't lay your shit on me It's not my fault you cant see... Pain and Trauma run deep in my heart You might think you have an art But babe..... It hurts more than you can see... Me or her? It might not occur to you how much it means Glamour girl over miss perfection? Which one? You cant have both... Which one means the most? Prove your love for me let me see... show me what i mean to you Or if it's her... Don't keep me hanging Let me Know so i can go But please dont leave I need you here I need you here to protect me and keep..::I LOVE YOU::..
by ~Broken-Tears-Poetry
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A CRIME OF LOVE?A crime of love? I said I loved youA CRIME OF LOVE?
Was that a crime? I said I need you
Was that a crime? I said I trust you
Was that a crime? I said that i would never leave you
Was that a crime? I asked you never to leave me
Was that a crime? I wanted you to face me
Was that a crime?
In my eyes this is a crime of love!
by ~crazygracy
The Happy MindSuddenly I take a deep breath A smooth beam caresses my face The environment seems out of mess It is like an atmosphere of odd graceThe Happy Mind
I open my eyes and stand awake Amazed by exotic striking blossoms I even perceive a miraculous lake Departing from very high mountains
The panorama looks like a fantastic paradise Birds are flying and aromas are fluttering I even notice a man looking very wise My emotions panic and my heart starts beating
I am fond of the air, the water and the sands It brings a sensation that is one of a kind It is like one
by ~crazygracy
I know...BUTI know I have messed up But I also know that I woke upI know...BUT
I know it is too late But you said once we are fate
I know your feelings have changed But I want everything to be arranged
I know you are hurt and fed up But I wish you only let me make it up
I know it is a risky step to do But what if this time it can be true
I know you might have forgotten about any chance But I am so hollow because I lost you in a glance
I know you want me to shut up and go away But I just can not let our love fade away
I know you know ho
by ~crazygracy
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GraceY
Perhaps more mental images, similies and metaphors..
eg .. I felt broken like the bones of a small child after falling from a window, like all the world was washed with the pain that I feel in that one moment,
If that is how you feel..
Rhyme is cool so try and bring the images into the rhyme some how..
She.. I love you, the way I feel, and pour my heart..
Maybe try and give us more mental images.. and pictures to give us more of a poetic feel of what the feelings are inside you..
eg I felt broken ... like the bones of a small child after falling from a window.. innocent and smashed twisted and torn feeling like the world has been reduced to this feeling this all engulfing pain..
If that is what your feeling..
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